Night Owl Reviews
One evening Majid mistakenly calls the wrong man (he intended to call his friend), and ends up chatting with Zavon. While Majid realizes his mistake early on Zavon does an excellent job of keeping Majid engaged enough for both men to start an awkward conversation that leaves then both wanting more. Talk Dirty to Me started as a flawed but entertaining erotic romance. It has all of the ingredients right in the story: charismatic protagonists, interesting plot, fun supporting characters and the sex scenes were also well done. My main criticism of the story is the choice to add in quirky behavioral traits to both Zavon and Majid in the back half of the story. They are both inconsistently drawn, but one worked better for me than the other. For example, Majid’s insecurities seemed to completely overtake him towards the end. His initial reservation to meeting with Zavon is totally understandable, but I just felt it was a little odd that he became more noticeably insecure as he opened up to Zavon. It would have been a less jarring experience to have those behaviors well established at the beginning and then have them flow through the story. It felt as if it was suddenly tacked on to create extra drama. Zavon was presented as a relaxed, sex positive man who was driven to make himself into a better person; at least on the phone he came off that way. In his everyday life he is a little more conservative. His personality switch was more believable given his line of work. Another minor issue that I had is that the reader is not provided with a thorough description of any of the characters. Vague details are scattered throughout the story, but they were not good enough to give me a better sense of both men. Instead I just used the hot guys on the cover of the e-book to fill in those details. If the book had those details it would have helped me connect better with the story. Even with the flaws, I do recommend Talk Dirty to Me. It was a satisfying short story that many would enjoy.